Hello Ms. Thanh,thank you very much

Hello Ms. Thanh,

thank you very much for the second draft of our Vietnam Detox flyer.
Unfortunately, only today I found time to print the flyer and review the changes you have made.

I noticed a number of things, in particular, many of the changes I had outlined in the pdf itself either through editing comments or through yellow stickers, have not been implemented. Furthermore, the reference listed in the email below has also not been included into the new version.

As a result, I will not comment in the pdf anymore, put list every change to be made in detail in this email.

The flyer has a total of six pages, I will go through each page one by one:

1. Cover page (Vietnam logo on top, Treat yourself to short brake… in the bottom)
a. I like the green intertwined waves instead the rigid red line
b. Please position the waves in such a way that there is no empty space between the individual lines. Maybe some of the waves have to be thicker to achieve that. If you have a particular reason for this look please explain me your thinking behind it and I may be convinced :-)
c. When I folded the flyer, and looked at the cover page, I can’t see why anybody would want to pick if up, especially if there are many other flyers next to it. The image is very dark and does not show any vibrancy. We need to find a look and feel that is catching the eyes of browser. Remember, this flyer will be displayed in supermarkets, restaurants and other public places. So my key point here is that we need to redesign the cover page to make people want to pick up the flyer.
d. The sentence “Treat yourself…” does not stand out enough - let’s wait for the new design of the cover page.
e. One possibly eye catching message should be around the fact that these detox retreats are new in Vietnam and the methodology is from Germany. New and Germany may be facts which cause attention. Now in Vietnam…. New in Vietnam…. German style detox retreats… Maybe a german flag and a vietnamese flag or wave…I leave the creative bit to you.
f. As we don’t offer a beach retreat (yet) it might be good to show a picture with water (waterfall, river, lake… I have sent you a selection of pictures which contain water)

2. Page 2 (Detox retreats, Wellness coaching, Wellness workshop)
a. The font size of all pages is too small, please use at least 11 points making it easy for people to read
b. Please replace the text in the mage with the following: Juice detox weekends, 8-day fasting retreats, wellness workshops
c. Paragraph 1 is ok
d. Paragraph 2: please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Vietnam Detox helps you to reconnect with yourself by connecting you with nature and by building awareness about your role in creating health and wellness for yourself.
e. Paragraph 3 is ok
f. Paragraph 4: please adjust. Try one of our retreats or wellness workshops to experience the positive and powerful impact you can have on your health and wellbeing.
g. Please delete Happiness and health, the line and From Vietnam Detox.

3. Page 3 (Fasting, Hiking, Healthy Living….)
a. Please swop Fasting, Hiking… with What is “Fastenwandern”? Fastenwandern is the first statement, Fasting, Hiking healthy living, is the second statement
b. Paragraph 1 is ok
c. Paragraph 2: Please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Based on the work and guiding principles of Dr. Otto Buchinger, the German pioneer of medical fasting, tens of thousands of Europeans are embracing the benefits of fastenwandern and go every year on this health boosting adventure to reconnect with nature, themselves and to purify their bodies and minds from toxins and stress.
d. Why “Fastenwandern” retreats? ok
e. Paragraph 3: Please adjust.
Vietnam Detox brings this very successful form of detox from Germany for the first time to Vietnam to support you in taking responsibility for yourself and to embrace healthy living habits. If you are living in the urban centers of South East Asia and beyond, you know how air and water pollution, traffic, noise and stress, can challenge your feeling of well being.
Vietnam Detox Retreats are designed for people with no previous experience who want to maintain or improve their overall well being and quality of life.

4. Page 4 (Feedback)

a. Please move this page to 5
b. 1st statement by Birgit T, please keep
c. Please add a new statement from Janine G from HCMC, Vietnam on top of the first statement in point b. If the text is too much to fit, please edit to shorten.
"For me, the Juice Detox Retreat was a new experience. It involved keeping muscles moving (morning exercises, gentle hiking, yoga) to ensure no muscle wastage whilst enjoying 5 juices daily to help the body to detox. Enjoying the retreat in such a beautiful Hotel, set in picture-perfect treed grounds on a lake in Dalat, was peaceful & relaxing. The air was so clean & fresh; just text-book for all of the outdoor activities & meditation we enjoyed. The Juice Detox Retreat is considered a Fast, but is so much

Kết quả (Anh) 1:

Hello, Ms.Thank you very much for the second draft of our Vietnam Detox flyer.Unfortunately, only today I found time to print the flyer and review the changes you have made.I noticed a number of things, in particular, many of the changes I had outlined in the pdf itself either through editing comments or through yellow stickers, have not been implemented. Furthermore, the reference listed in the email below has also not been included into the new version. As a result, I will not comment in the pdf anymore, put list every change to be made in detail in this email.The flyer has a total of six pages, I will go through each page one by one:1. Cover page (Vietnam logo on top, Treat yourself to short brake ... in the bottom)a. I like the green intertwined waves instead the rigid red lineb. Please position the waves in such a way that there is no empty space between the individual lines. Maybe some of the waves have to be thicker to achieve that. If you have a particular reason for this look please explain me your thinking behind it and I may be convinced:-)c. When I folded the flyer, and looked at the cover page, I can't see why anybody would want to pick if up, especially if there are many other flyers next to it. The image is very dark and does not show any vibrancy. We need to find a look and feel that is catching the eyes of browser. Remember, this flyer will be displayed in supermarkets, restaurants and other public places. So my key point here is that we need to redesign the cover page to make people want to pick up the flyer.d. The sentence "Treat yourself ..." does not stand out enough-let's wait for the new design of the cover page.e. One possibly eye catching message should be around the fact that these detox retreats are new in Vietnam and the methodology is from Germany. New and Germany may be facts which cause attention. Now in Vietnam. ... New in Vietnam. ... German style detox retreats ... Maybe a german flag and a vietnamese flag or wave ... I leave the creative bit to you.f. As we don't offer a beach retreat (yet) it might be good to show a picture with water (waterfall, river, lake ... I have sent you a selection of pictures which contain water)2. Page 2 (Detox retreats, Wellness coaching, Wellness workshop)a. The font size of all pages is too small, please use at least 11 points making it easy for people to readb. Please replace the text in the mage with the following: Juice detox weekends, 8-day fasting retreats, wellness workshopsc. Paragraph 1 is okd. Paragraph 2: please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Vietnam Detox helps you to reconnect with yourself by connecting you with nature and by building awareness about your role in creating a health and wellness for yourself.e. Paragraph 3 is okf. Paragraph 4: please adjust. Try one of our retreats or wellness workshops to experience the positive and powerful impact you can have on your health and wellbeing.g. Please delete Happiness and health, the line and From Vietnam Detox.3. Page 3 (Fasting, Hike, Healthy Living ....)a. Please swop Fasting, Hike ... with What is "Fastenwandern"? Fastenwandern is the first statement, Fasting, Hike healthy living, is the second statementb. Paragraph 1 is okc. Paragraph 2: Please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Based on the work and guiding principles of Dr. Otto Buchinger, the German pioneer of medical fasting, tens of thousands of Europeans are embracing the benefits of fastenwandern and go every year on this health boosting action to reconnect with nature, themselves and to purify their bodies and minds from toxins and stress.d. Why "Fastenwandern" retreats? OKe. Paragraph 3: Please adjust. Vietnam Detox brings this very successful form of detox from Germany for the first time to Vietnam to support you in taking responsibility for yourself and to embrace healthy living habits. If you are living in the urban centers of South East Asia and beyond, you know how air and water pollution, traffic, noise and stress, can challenge your feeling of well being.Vietnam Detox Retreats are designed for people with no previous experience who want to maintain or improve their overall well being and quality of life.4. Page 4 (Feedback)a. Please move this page to 5b. the 1st statement by Birgit T, please keepc. Please add a new statement from Janine G from HCMC, Vietnam on top of the first statement in point b. If the text is too much to fit, please edit to shorten."For me, the Juice Detox Retreat was a new experience. It involved keeping muscles moving (exercises.of all morning, gentle hike, yoga) to ensure no muscle wastage whilst enjoying 5 juices daily to help the body to detox. Enjoying the retreat in such a beautiful Hotel, set in picture-perfect treed grounds on a lake in Dalat, was peaceful & relaxing. The air was so clean & fresh; just text-book for all of the outdoor activities & meditation we enjoyed. The Juice Detox Retreat is considered a Fast, but is so much

Kết quả (Anh) 2:

Hello Ms. Bar,

thank you very much for the second draft of our Vietnam Detox flyer.
Tại, only today I found time to print the flyer and review the changes you have made.

I noticed a number of things, in Particular, many of the changes I Had outlined in the pdf editing Itself through comments or through hoặc yellow stickers, have được thực. Furthermore, the reference in the email listed below has cũng vào được new version included.

As a result, I will not comment in the pdf anymore, put the list every change to be made in detail in this email.

The flyer has a total of six pages, I will go through each page one by one:

1. Cover page (Vietnam logo on top, ... Treat yourself to short brake in the bottom)
a. I like the green intertwined waves thay the rigid red line
b. Please position the waves in a way có có có empty space giữa the individual lines. Maybe some of the waves have to be thicker to Achieve that. If you have reason for this look một please explain me your thinking behind it and I unfortunately be convinced :-)
c. When I folded the flyer, and Looked at the cover page, I can not see why anybody would want to pick up the if, Especially if there are many other flyers next to it. The image is very dark and does not show any vibrancy. We need to find a look and feel catching the eyes of nằm browser. Remember, this flyer Will Be displayed in Supermarkets, restaurants and other public places. Key point here is my comparison We Need to redesign có the cover page to Make People want to pick up the flyer.
D. The sentence "Treat yourself ..." does not stand out enough - let's wait for the new design of the cover page.
F. One possibly eye catching message around the fact có nên detox retreats những are new in Vietnam and the Methodology is from Germany. New and Germany lẽ facts mà-cause attention. Now in Vietnam .... New in Vietnam .... German style detox retreats ... Maybe a german flag and a vietnamese flag or wave ... I leave the creative bit to you.
F. As We do not offer a beach retreat (yet) It Might Be good to show a picture with water (waterfall, river, lake ... I have sent you a selection of pictures mà chứa water)

2. Page 2 (Detox retreats, coaching Wellness, Wellness workshop)
a. The font size of all pages is too small, please use at Least 11 points making it easy for People to read
b. Please replace the text in the mage with sau: Juice detox weekends, 8-day fasting retreats, wellness workshops
c. Paragraph 1 is ok
d. Paragraph 2: please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Vietnam helps you to reconnect with Detox yourself by connecting you with nature and by building name awareness about your role in health and wellness for yourself tạo.
E. Paragraph 3 is ok
f. Paragraph 4: please adjust. Try one of our wellness retreats or workshops to experience the positive and powerful impact you can have on health and Wellbeing ngôn.
G. Please delete Happiness and health, the line and Detox From Vietnam.

3. Page 3 (Fasting, Hiking, Healthy Living ....)
A. Please SWOP Fasting, Hiking ... with What is "Fastenwandern"? Fastenwandern is the first statement, Fasting, Hiking, healthy living, is the second statement
b. Paragraph 1 is ok
c. Paragraph 2: Please adjust. 1st sentence is ok. Based on the work and Guiding Principles of Dr. Otto Buchinger, the German pioneer of medical fasting, tens of Thousands of Europeans are embracing the benefits of fastenwandern and go every year on this adventure to reconnect with health boosting nature, Themselves and to purify the bodies and Minds có from toxins and stress.
D. Why "Fastenwandern 'retreats? ok
e. Paragraph 3: Please adjust.
Vietnam Detox Brings very successful this form of detox from Germany for the first time to Vietnam to support you in taking Responsibility for yourself and to Embrace Healthy Living Habits. If you are living in the urban centers of South East Asia and beyond, you know how air and water pollution, traffic, noise and stress, can challenge feeling of well being ngôn.
Vietnam Detox Retreats are Designed for People with no previous experience who want Maintain or Improve to ask for their overall well being and quality of life.

4. Page 4 (Feedback)

a. Please remove this page to 5
b. 1st statement by Birgit T, please keep
c. Please add a new statement from Janine G from HCMC, Vietnam on top of the first statement in point b. If the text is too much to fit, please edit to shorten.
"For me, the Juice Detox Retreat was a new experience. It Involved keeping muscles moving (morning exercises, gentle hiking, yoga) to Ensure no muscle wastage whilst enjoying 5 juices daily to help the body to detox. Enjoying the retreat in vd a beautiful hotel, set in picture-perfect treed grounds on a lake in Dalat, was peaceful & relaxing. The air was so clean & fresh; just text-book for all of the outdoor activities & Meditation We enjoyed. The Juice Detox Retreat is Considered a Fast, but is so much